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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantages of charging people for a museum outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, while some museums can be visited free of charge, others require an entrance
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 to be paid. I firmly believe that the advantages of
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 tendency are greater than the disadvantages and will speculate about my viewpoint in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are two main benefits of charging a certain sum of money. One of them is that the
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 allows maintaining the conditions of exponents and the building itself which in the long-term future ensures the presence of all the precious objects in the
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, including artworks, statues and books. Another equally significant advantage of charging the
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 is directly linked to safety. The
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, as small as it can be, ensures safety since it is usually spent on the installation of cameras and other technological appliances aimed to preserve the building from rubbers. Providing that the system is sufficient enough, diminishes the number of rubbery acts,
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 making the
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 a safer place to spend pastime .
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 to
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, the
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 that requires some money to enter is less likely to be affected by vandalized people.
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, those who are considered to be potentially hazardous would not pay anything and
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, the
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 will be visited only by open-minded people who will not even ponder over damaging exponents or making noise. Taking into account everything stated above, I can deduce that at least a small amount of money should be paid in order to maintain the
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 and make it safe for the visitors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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