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Nowadays parents give more freedom to their children than in the past. is it a positive or negative development. Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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Currently,
children
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 can enjoy
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 level of
freedom
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, as opposed to that of their
parents
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 when there were kids. In my opinion, it is a positive improvement, because in
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 way
children
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 can develop their self-confidence and gain important knowledge from their experiences.
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, I believe that
freedom
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 is strictly connected with trust,
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parents
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 should give
freedom
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 to their
children
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 based on the trust they have towards them.
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 of all, it is important to let a
child
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 be free to try new things. By having new experiences, meeting different people, and exploring new places, kids have the opportunity to learn precious information, but
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 to understand what they like and dislike.
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 being too worried about leaving their
children
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 free to spend time outside will ultimately transfer their fears to them.
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 way, they will damage
children
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's naturally positive and proactive nature, making them suspicious towards
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new things.
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, if a father keeps prohibiting his son to ride a bicycle because it is dangerous, the son is likely to become wary and scared of cycling.
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, a supporting and encouraging parent makes a self-confident and independent
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.
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, it is important to give
children
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 the level of
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 they deserve to avoid unpleasant situations. I believe a kid should gain his
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, and in order to do that, he should show his
parents
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 that he is reliable and responsible.
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, if a parent allows his
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 to walk home from school on his own, the
child
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 should be punctual so that he will gain his
parents
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' trust. To conclude, I positively consider
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 new trend:
children
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 should be given wide
freedom
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.
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,
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freedom
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 should always be earnt.
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