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More people today are overweight than ever before. what are the primary causes of this? what measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic.

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Nowadays obesity is the biggest problem in all of the countries. overweight is facing all over the ages. one of the reasons is fast
food
 and using sugar, flour
items
 they are more carbohydrates and unhealthy
food
items
. the solution to
this
 obesity can be decreased by the government by using some awareness of the
people
 and some exercise parks to provide in public places.in
this
 essay, I can explain the main causes and solutions of obesity.
Firstly
, nowadays more
people
 are attracted to eat fast
food
 it can be easily available on the way the streets. many nations' fast-
food
 restaurants
also
 increasing because it is easily available for working
people
 and children. kids
also
 attract sugary
items
 and
junk
 foods like pizzas, burgers .parents should be avoided to give that item to children. in
junk
food
, more carbohydrates are there it will gain the weight easily. The main reason problem is more
people
 are getting lazy to do some exercises and follow to the healthy diet because their busy schedule.it will be controlled
people
 should do some workouts on their lifestyles like cycling and outdoor games like badminton tenis if they can do they control their adiposity.
Furthermore
, it can be decreased by the government to do some awareness programs and to reduce the taxes on healthy products. authority should arrange the exercise parks society can easily go and do that exercises. reduce the
junk
food
 advertisements rather than they can show to the public healthy
food
items
 and their uses. In conclusion,
people
 should follow a healthy diet and they can avoid
junk
food
 and fast-
food
 and do
the
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daily exercise to control the overweight .and government
also
 take the responsibility of public awareness.
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