Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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Nowadays,it is common to see
migration
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the migration
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of people in urban
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.It has been observed that overpopulation in cities
are
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becoming
major
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problem in the world.There are several reasons for
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a situation and some primitive steps can be taken to overcome
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issues.
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with, out of all the foremost is the high wages. To explain it, the metropolis has lots of jobs opportunities as compared to the village. For the better salary individuals choose to stay in
city
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the city
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.Where can get jobs as well as good wages
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, data has concluded that in India every year 1 million,
peoples
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are moved
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urban
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from tribal
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. Another one is
better
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lifestyle as well as
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education. To explicate it,
metro
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the metro
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offers many
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and
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good colleges and schools.Students can consume better knowledge .
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Like the gym, restaurants, malls can entertain people.
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, the public migrated to
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such
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as reasons.
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, some measures are can be taken to solve
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problem.
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, development of
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the village
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. The government should
improved
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some work opportunities in the
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, like industry.Where
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an individual
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individual
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can earn high money.
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, should be developed higher education University in rural
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and some
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like hotels. It can be reduced to
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of people to going cities.
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, in
China
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almost
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are available in all villages. To sum up, increasing population in urban
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,
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is becoming
dangerous
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a dangerous
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problem for us.Regarding
improvement
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the improvement
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of tribal
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for
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example,
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education system and
facilities
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can stop
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situation. .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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