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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, due to the increase in popularity of social media, many
people
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 prefer to get informed there free of charge rather
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than in
than
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 and books. To a certain
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, I agree with that statement and some main points will be addressed in the following paragraphs.
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 with, most young
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 know how to use smartphones and computers and they have an account on social platforms. There you can find anything from current news or from old ones, just by clicking
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 an article or by writing some
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keywords
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key words
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 for what you want to search for.
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, what someone cannot find
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newspapers
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 but can find online are videos of an event,
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voice records
 or photographs that someone can zoom in detail and zoom out, which
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, can pass several feelings to whoever
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 that.
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 the current historical invasion in Ukraine will undoubtedly be written
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 books, but in the
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 young
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 will be able to watch the videos online to get a more realistic view of what means war.
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 most of these media do not need a subscription
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newspapers
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.
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, anyone can write an article online without being checked if the facts are correct or even true, whereas in
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 editors have professional journalists.
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, even though young
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 are the
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, there are still
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elders
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 who do not know how to use the internet
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 they prefer traditional means to
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. In conclusion, in my point of
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 most
people
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 will prefer online ways to get informed in the
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 but
also
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 might be a part of them who will still prefer printed
newspapers
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 and books.
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, in the very long
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 printed ways may be erased.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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