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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
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Today's
world
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 is the
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 of technology, due to globalisation everyone is connected to
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 another through technology and has access to every kind of
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.
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 some consider that sharing scientific research, business and academic
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 publicly is good while others do not support
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 idea.
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 ,in my opinion , everyone has the right to get
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 about what is happening in the
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, so sharing
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 is good as it would be beneficial for some.
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, people support the notion that
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 regarding education,science and business should be shared because they might think it is the right of every human to know about what is happening in every sector of the
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. In
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 competitive
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 , it is essential for everyone to be aware of the current affairs , what research has been made in the field of science , how can
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 make his business profitable and
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 but not the least how can
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 be eligible for higher degree courses in
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 of the renowned universities in the
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.
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, sharing
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 type of
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 might
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 inspire the young generation to be productive in their lives.
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, having
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 about every sector could help adults to choose their future careers by finding their field of interest.
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, some believe that info related to scientific research , trade and the academic sector can not be revealed to anyone as
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information
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 is important and valuable to be shared publicly. The reason behind
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 would be the privacy and not giving ideas to other nations so that they could not implement these ideas in their own nations and become able to compete with the host nation.
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, China has made a closed system of the internet in its country and no
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 in the
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 has access to its data. China has used
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 policy because it does not want other nations to know about their activities as it wants to be
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 of the most powerful democracies in the
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 as America. In conclusion, sharing data is a personal decision whether
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 wants to share it or not.,
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 in my view , it should be shared with people so that
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 can take advantage and
knowledge
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 from it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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