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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own country, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe is it important to teach
kids
 their national article and
history
;
in contrast
, there are some people that
also
 believe that global
literature
 is as important as the national one.
this
 essay will examine both points of view.
firstly
, it is important to build a national pride for children. At an early age, it will be easier for them to accept propaganda, patriotism, and national principles, yet they did not even understand the concept of countries or nations. The article about global
history
 will not only make them confused, but it
also
 seems not critical for their period of growth and understanding;
for instance
 in Soth East Asia, many elementary schools did not conclude the past of other nations and it makes sense because of sometimes the
history
 about nations requires deeper analysis and understanding that children do not have.
however
, understanding global
history
 and
literature
 may create a new concept of thinking that
kids
 may need to understand.
This
 new approach of thinking can create a linked unsolved mystery of
literature
 in
history
 that can be discussed and developed to gain their interest in
history
-making;
furthermore
, at elementary school, the person mostly gains their interest and passion that can help them choose the right major for their university. in conclusion, there is nothing wrong with
kids
 learning national or global
literature
 and
history
 and there will be advantages and disadvantages about
kids
 learning both. The most important thing is how the parents and teachers eliminate which part is necessary for children to learn so it can be interesting and still understandable for
kids
.
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