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IT HAS BECOME A STANDARD PART OF SCHOOL OF CURRICULA IN MOST SECONDARY SCHOOL. IT COULD BE DANGER THAT IT SKILLS ARE BEING TAUGHT AT EXPENSE OF MORE BASIC SKILLS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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In most schools, curricula have evolved into
technology
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-oriented and basic subjects are being deleted which could be detrimental to
students
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essay I will explain why I believe that teaching more hours of IT subjects could be detrimental to
students
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. I agree with Information
Technology
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 (IT) subject could be a threat for others courses oriented to art or science, because there is more to quality education than using computers to study. It is well known that
technology
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 makes people´s lives easier,
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 has led us to do less mental and physical effort which in turn may lead us to lose many
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.
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skills
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 as writing poems, painting, or playing a musical instrument could disappear along the time. Today, we know that
technology
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 is highly beneficial for everyone in the world ,
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 must be taught in late stages
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 because children need to develop other important
skills
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. If the curricula evolve into
technology
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-oriented, we could have a society without writers, artists, musicians or painters, so our humanity could be lost.
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, the misuse of
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 can lead to severe addiction in youngsters, and they end up becoming dependent on it.
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 happens because children do not know how to tell right from wrong. The more hours they spend on the devices, the more social
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 they lose.
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, there are many
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 focused on the computer, without going out, talking or even playing games outside with friends.
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, IT should be taught carefully in primary school, and teachers should show video clips to raise awareness about the negative consequences of using computers for long hours in children.
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, I strongly believe
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 of the utmost importance to keep other subjects in the curricula
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 as art or agriculture that could help
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 to develop friendship ties, listening and talking to others which make us strong human beings. In conclusion,
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 schools are becoming
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-oriented, they should focus on basic
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. I am of the idea that basic
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 are worth it, and
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 will strengthen our society.
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