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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter • thank them for the photos and for the holiday • explain why you didn't write earlier • invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear Arpan, Hi, how are you doing? I hope
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 letter finds you in good health and best wishes of spirits. I really want to thank you for giving me a wonderful holiday.Yesterday, I received our photos which are fantastic, and I am amazed that you clicked
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 beautiful photos. And I really apologize that I could not message you because I had exams so after returning from the trip, I was busy with my studies and now I am free. I saw these photos which are loveable and the trip was unforgettable. But, here I am angry with you because I always come to your place and stay for stay with you for a week. I invited you many times
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 you never came.
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,
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 time, I want you to come to Montreal and stay with me for some days. We will really enjoy it.I hope you will come
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 summer. I am looking forward to getting a positive reply from you. Best wishes, Jeevan.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea; for instance, separate the expression of gratitude and the invitation into distinct paragraphs for better clarity.
task response
Consider using a more polite and friendly tone throughout the letter, especially when expressing disappointment about the friend's visits. This will enhance the overall warmth of your message.
task response
The letter has a friendly tone and successfully conveys appreciation for the holiday and the photos, which is essential for this type of correspondence.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear closing that expresses anticipation for a reply, which adds to the friendliness of the letter.
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