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In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Over the past decade, there is a dramatic change in how offspring are brought up. Some people think that it is beneficial to give independence to
children
 compared to the previous generations,
however
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 others condemn
this
 idea. I agree that a child needs to be independent,
however
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parents
 need to monitor them until they reach a certain age to ensure that they are on the right track. On one hand, in the current world, the patience limit of offspring has been degraded to a considerable extent. They get demotivated easily within the spur of the moment, thereby, there is a fair chance they deviate from studies, get addicted to either drugs or alcohol if they are in a bad company either physically or through social media.
For example
, the number of teenagers committing suicide has increased significantly due to fear of failure in exams because they are not emotionally strong and are unable to evaluate the situation.
Hence
,
parents
 should play an important role in motivating and guiding their offspring to take wise decisions whenever appropriate.
On the other hand
,
children
 now are intelligent enough to make their own decisions,
for
instance
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 many young adults in recent days are focused, and they own most of the crucial decisions
such
 as choosing their university and career. To illustrate, even though one of my friends'
parents
 are illiterate and they are not aware of the job opportunities, their daughter excelled in her studies and she has become a civil servant, which is a challenging job for the majority of pupils.
Therefore
,
children
 are capable of deciding their future using various means like the Internet, unlike previous generations where knowledge was limited. To conclude, I strongly agree that
children
 need to be provided sufficient freedom to enable them to choose the correct path,
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 they need to be supervised by their
parents
 to ensure they do not deviate.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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