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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the kicauses of this? How can this problem be solved?

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Nowadays, the migration from the country to the urban areas involves the moving of big crowds, much bigger than what cities can absorb.
Thus
, the big metropolis is overpopulated and can no longer offer housing to everyone, leading to the creation of slums where a criminal life seems to be the only option.
This
 could be prevented by implementing solutions that can give the population of rural areas an alternative to migration. In
this
 essay, I will suggest a solution that can be adopted to mitigate
this
 issue.
Firstly
, most people do not want to leave their house and friends unless it is necessary.
For example
, famine and bad crops are the motivation for farmers to pack and move to places where job opportunities are offered.
Therefore
, millions of newcomers gather every year around the economic poles of the country expecting to earn their living. The consequence of it is the rise of criminality due to the lack of employment.
Moreover
, the sanitary conditions of these new neighbourhoods affect the environment badly. Illegal dumpsters flourish and uncontrolled sewage occurs every day around the ghetto.
For instance
, some affections that were on the brink of disappearing, like tuberculosis or leprosy, have surged again due to
this
 unhealthy environment. Cities can not allow
this
 kind of situation because it is dangerous and can cause an epidemic. Taking all these into account, my suggestion is avoiding that exodus from the fields is to offer job opportunities to the peasants that prevent them from making the decision of packing. Some initiatives have been made on modernising agriculture, that not only have benefited farmers but
also
 aided nature to recover extensions that were ploughed in an inefficient way.
Besides
, new jobs are created around these farms. In my opinion, towns and fields must coexist and the modernisation of agronomy can be the solution for towns' massification.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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