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Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Children
 who use computers every day are more prone to have negative impacts on them at an early age.
Parents
 play a vital role in raising their
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
show examples
 to be proper and mature adults.
Additionally
, They are
also
 responsible for disciplining their child when it comes to focusing on their studies.
Therefore
, It is agreed that
computer
 usage without proper supervision and limitation can be a negative impact on
children
.
Firstly
, procrastination and distractions play a role here in
children
 at a young age, they will often get more distracted when it comes to doing assignments. If
for example
, a child has been on the
computer
 for more than 8 hours a day it becomes a habit for them, and it is almost impossible for them to be able to accomplish coursework in school.
Although
 having access to computers for information is an advantage it could
also
 be a disadvantage if
parents
 are not too limiting and supervising
computer
 use.
Secondly
, by limiting
computer
 use,
parents
 should encourage their
children
 at a young age to be more physically active, be creative through arts, and be more sociable among other
children
.
This
 ensures that they can be physically active and socially active as well as their peers.
Additionally
,
parents
 can introduce a timetable of daily
computer
 usage as long as it's something educational and beneficial for them in the future. In conclusion,
children
 have all-time in the world to enjoy themselves and be young and learn from their
parents
 and teachers, yet they spend their time in front of their computers all day rather than participating in active play outside with other
children
.
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