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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Children
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 who use computers every day are more prone to have negative impacts on them at an early age.
Parents
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 play a vital role in raising their
child
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children
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 to be proper and mature adults.
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, They are
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 responsible for disciplining their child when it comes to focusing on their studies.
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, It is agreed that
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 usage without proper supervision and limitation can be a negative impact on
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, procrastination and distractions play a role here in
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 at a young age, they will often get more distracted when it comes to doing assignments. If
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, a child has been on the
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 for more than 8 hours a day it becomes a habit for them, and it is almost impossible for them to be able to accomplish coursework in school.
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 having access to computers for information is an advantage it could
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 be a disadvantage if
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 are not too limiting and supervising
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 use.
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, by limiting
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 use,
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 should encourage their
children
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 at a young age to be more physically active, be creative through arts, and be more sociable among other
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 ensures that they can be physically active and socially active as well as their peers.
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,
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 can introduce a timetable of daily
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 usage as long as it's something educational and beneficial for them in the future. In conclusion,
children
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 have all-time in the world to enjoy themselves and be young and learn from their
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 and teachers, yet they spend their time in front of their computers all day rather than participating in active play outside with other
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