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The homeless population is growing in many cities around the world. What is the cause of this? What can be done to help this growing problem?

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Globally there is an unprecedented rise in the number of
people
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 without proper shelter in
cities
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. Throughout
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons for the surge in homeless
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 and suggest possible solutions to mitigate
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 prevalent issue in
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 with, economic factors play a major contributing role towards
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 being without homes in urban
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. As inflation in the cost of basic commodities, along with the rising cost of rent, makes it unaffordable for individuals to have a roof over their
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, with the persistent increase in unemployment in
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, many
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 do not have a constant income to offset the increased cost of housing.
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, many a time,it is
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 noticed that
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 in
cities
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 become homeless due to falling into bad debt or resorting to certain vices.
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, many of the
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 in new york city, without a proper residence, are drug addicts or alcoholics and have fallen into bad times due to their addiction, leaving them without proper work and income. One solution to the problem of homelessness could be the government coming out with certain measures to deflate the soaring prices of housing infrastructure.
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, the public institutions must implement programmes, ensuring houses at
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rate
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rates
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 for
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 who cannot afford
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, In India, the local corporations in
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 have funded a series of building construction, providing flats to impoverished
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. At the same time, it is critical that grassroots issues,
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 addressed, which will aid in getting jobs. In order to address the issue of drug consumption and alcoholism, there must be proper rehabilitation programmes in place by the government, ensuring that the person is not left to be on his own and is able to start a new life with at least a place to stay. In conclusion, the country's economy and personal habits are the major reasons why an individual might be left without a proper place to stay.
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, it is imperative that timely action is taken by public bodies, with proper programmes to combat the growing issue of homelessness among the urban population.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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