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In some countries, some criminal trials in law courts are shown on television so that the general public can watch them. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Across the globe, while most countries usually hold criminal trials behind closed doors, others broadcast legal
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 on television for the general public. I will discuss
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 how its advantages outweigh the
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. Most people think that televising live criminal court
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 has its benefits.
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, it shows the transparency of the country’s legal system
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 It allows the public the right to information. They can have access to the details of the trials so they can form their own opinion.
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 is important in countries where the government restricts public access to information. An example is in the case of O.J Simpson, a national football player charged with murdering his wife.
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 he is a national celebrity, the general public can rest assured that he will be given a fair trial.
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, it strengthens the people’s faith and trust in the country’s legal system, and the Constitution. People will get to know and understand the rule of law and the judicial process. Any act of violence will not be tolerated and comes with a price.
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, showcasing court cases on television does not come without any flaws. Close relatives of the defendant may be stigmatised as a consequence of the offender’s actions Families of the perpetrator will have to bear the emotional difficulties throughout the
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, psychological support can be provided to help the families deal with any backlash from the public.
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, children who watch the
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 on-air may be exposed to the violence and unwanted trauma from the crime scene.
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 drawback can be reduced if children are restricted from the courtroom. In conclusion, there are both advantages and
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 of showing criminal trials on TV, but I believe the benefits outweigh the
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. The
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 can be prevented by the steps mentioned above.
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