In many countries, people have more health problems because they choose to live an unhealthy lifestyle. What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved? Give relevant examples from your experience.

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I think
people
eat useful foods, and again they are
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time eating habits.
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everyone has influenced to
good
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way
theirselves
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themselves
their life.
People
enjoy
eat
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fast food but
this
situation
not
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useful. If they
everytime
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use proper nutrition never get ill and. If who wants life a lot of time and nice life use proper nutrition. ,
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I would recommend everyone drink a lot of water all day, it is very important and again beneficial. For
people
's organisms that
most
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useful.
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advice
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for everyone
engage
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with
sport
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of types, it is too nice for
people
's organisms. If who engages with
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this
person
always seen
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young and again bonny. I always recommend to
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everybody engage sport of type special swimming, because it
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very
good
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for
people
's health. Because I am too much
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with swimming and again football.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • technological advancements
  • fast food
  • processed food
  • dietary choices
  • stressful work environments
  • neglect
  • health education
  • consequences
  • advertising
  • health programs
  • active living
  • policies
  • availability
  • nutrition studies
  • conducive environments
  • pedestrian areas
  • media campaigns
  • healthy lifestyle
  • risks
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