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Communication between family members has decreased in recent times. Do you agree or disagree?

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Family
members
 in the present day communicate less than in the past.
In addition
, to technological advancement, it is because of the tight working schedules people have to face.
Therefore
, I agree with the statement. To commence with, the number of family
members
 have been gradually decreasing for the
last
 few decades. The
first
 reason for the problem is individuals' lack of bonds and feeling for their parents, siblings and other family
members
.
For example
, most parents are now working outside for some reason. So
that is
 why they usually have little or no
time
 for their children.
As a result
, the child has little or no feeling for their parents, which restricts them from sharing their views and emotions with other family
members
.
Secondly
, the
members
 of the family are often busy themselves in different types of social activities.
Moreover
, they are a keen interest in spending their
time
 free
second
 with their friends and colleagues.
Consequently
, they have a little point for their siblings and children.
Last
 but not the least, Individuals are busy using social media, the internet and gaming. For that reason, children are wasting their valuable moments on the computer, the internet and other technologies that force them to avoid family
members
. In conclusion, presently, people have a limited amount of
time
 for their family. I believe that nowadays, both adults and child
members
 of a family spend a small amount of
time
 compared to the past because they are very busy in their personal life and avoid meeting their family
members
.
Submitted by Drashti satani on

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