Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Nowadays, the
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of homeless
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in metropolitan
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has been increasing worldwide. The main causes might be the recession including pricing up and the influx of
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to major
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for a better quality of life. We can tackle these issues by revitalizing a nation’s economy and by promoting more benefits of living in rural areas to residents living in
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. First of all, because of several aspects
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as a progressively ageing society and a dramatic decrease in the childbirth rate, the larger
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had a huge negative effect on their economy.
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can exacerbate the whole economic situation,
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resulting in spending excessive expenditure and
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going bankrupt.
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, the phenomenon of urbanisation can cause an influx of rural residents as most of them, especially younger generations, want to pursue a better quality of life or to achieve their dreams in their future careers.
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influx will allow competition in careers to become more challenging for
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in major
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because of an increasing
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of skilled workers from all over the world.
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, residents without any skills may end up obtaining no jobs and become homeless in the end. To solve these problems, there are two remedies that governments can do. One of them is that the governments could improve their economic situation again by making a national debt so that an increasing
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of companies can enlarge opportunities for employment for those homeless
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and revitalize their economy.
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, as the other solution, the government can
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promote the advantages of settling down in rural areas through a variety of media
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as TV or social media. In conclusion, there has been an increasing
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of homeless
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around the world.
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is
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the recession and an increasing
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of
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moving into
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.
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, these issues can be mitigated by making more national debts and by promoting the benefits of a life in the countryside.

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