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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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World Wide Web has developed rapidly with comparison to
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 decade.
Education
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The education
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system
 had upgraded into many possible and easily accessible ways. Often, some educational institutions are now offering a variety of courses online so that people can
easy
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 access and study online. In
this
 essay, we will discuss
about
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positive and negative developments of
education
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the education
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system
. On the one hand, while technology has become a medium for every task nowadays, anyone who
want
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 to access any information online is now easily available.
Thus
, it shows a positive sign where a student can get access to his university online without even being present at college.
For example
, if a person
want
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 to get some study material from the institution,
instead
 of visiting the organisation, an individual can grab the information online.
On the other hand
,
few
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a few
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 tasks cannot be fulfilled by
online
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an online
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 study
system
 as there would be no
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classroom
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class room
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classroom
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 interaction among the students and teachers. Because of
this
, any doubts or subject related questions cannot be taught to any pupil in
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an affective
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affective
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effective
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 manner.
For Instance
,
if
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an individual having a question in a class can be easily clarified by a
lecteurer
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lecturer
lecture
, whereas,
online
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the online
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system
 leaves many remarks among them. In reason to
this
, there are numerous advantages and disadvantages if people use it in a proper way. To conclude, I personally feel that if
education
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the education
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system
 has more flexible ways of learning things online, it is easier
to
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 any person to make themself self
efficeint
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efficient
.
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