The alarming rise of sexual assault in the country has led to calls for the death penalty to be imposed by law, but there are some who think those rapists should be made to suffer for life. What is your opinion on this point?

The cases of sexual harassment
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on the
increasing
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in a variety of countries has caused to demand
for
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the
death
discipline
that is
enforced by regulation while some
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that they should not get
punishment
. From my perspective, I agree that the
death
penalty must
given
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to the rapers because
these
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might able help to decrease the cases and to protect the preys from
the
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criminals
.
To begin
with, nowadays in
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social media
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that there
are
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numerous news of sexual assault which especially happen with children and adults. To stop
this
severe situation, it might seem over brutal for the rapists, but giving harsh
punishment
to them make them afraid of the laws and end the actions.
However
, it
certainly
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better than
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the
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criminals
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society and
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people
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of them. There are those who argue that some countries face
with
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the problem of sexual assault which their government can not handle with it. Due to
this
,
ther
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the
they
are several
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;
for instance
, the power of some
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of people which over control by
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and the rules not too strict enough to control the rapists.
As a result
, these problems should be solved by the increasing strict of laws.
Moreover
, victims must always be aware of their surroundings all the time to be safe from the
criminals
. In conclusion,
although
, the
death
punishment
must use with the rapists due to the fact that it might assist to reduce the problem as well as
to protect
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the victims from the illegals. People can get rid of sexual harassment reports by rising serious
punishment
similar to
death
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penalty to make the raper fear to behave.
Finally
, the
assosication
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association
will get better without
criminals
do not ought
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to be fearful of strangers.
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