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Q) The Internet is generally considered as a blessing for mankind. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 has a dynamic effect all over the
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. It is regarded to be a blessing for humanity in many ways. But whether it has more benefits than demerits is still a controversial issue to be debated.
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world
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. On the one side, the positive effects of
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is
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 enormous.
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. It allows
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 to face interaction with families who are miles away.
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, during earlier times it was not possible for a dad or mom away from home for work like working abroad or meet their families once in a while to see the growth of their children living with their parents in
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 country. But, today with innovation and technology, they are just a phone call away. By
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, relationships can be maintained without a crack in the household.
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,
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 provides vast amounts of information.
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, the war between Russia and Ukraine or things happening around the
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 can be known by searching web sources like Google. Everything is readily available on the
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. Social
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medias
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 play a major role among the youth. They can keep in touch with their old friends or chat with new people through Facebook, Instagram, etc.
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, all
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 of study materials
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 available online now which can help students to achieve good grades. On the other side, misuse of
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 can cause big problems. Nowadays all children are addicted to social
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. They spend too much time scrolling through it. They could utilise
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 time for lessons, being with family, or playing with friends. Looking too long can cause health and mental issues. And
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, these networks are becoming a place for anyone to comment on
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 life. Healthy discussions are appropriate but in these times,
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cyberbullying
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cyber bullying
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 is often taking place.
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 is a clear case of non-social activity. To summarise, living in a
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 without
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 is almost impossible in the current scenario. But, the way it is being used by
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person
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 makes it good or bad. I think if used in a good way, the advantages of
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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