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while some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Ever since the dawn of industrialisation, the world’s environment has been changing in a drastic manner. Many of these changes are of negative nature. Some argue that global warming is the most serious environmental issue that we deal with, while others contend deforestation has a much more damaging impact on the earth’s environment. Both sides of
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 debate will be analysed in
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 essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. On the one hand, global warming has raised the average temperature of the Earth by several degrees over the
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 few centuries, which has a myriad of negative ramifications for the inhabitants of the planet earth.
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, the continual rising of sea levels has put cities
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 as London, UK and Rotterdam, the Netherlands on the brink of being drowned by deluges.
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, governments have to devise new measures to keep
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 disasters from wiping out these cities entirely.
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, it is argued that global warming is the most serious problem our planet encounters.
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, many believe out of all the ecological problems, deforestation leaves the largest environmental footprint on Earth.
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, each year thousands of trees are being cut down in China to fuel the furnaces in industries to support their economy, which in turn has disturbed the balance of carbon dioxide in the environment. Since carbon dioxide is a toxic gas, respiratory problems in China have reached an exorbitant level in recent decades. When looking at the discussion in
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 light, the devastating effects of deforestation are obvious. Since both sides of
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, it is hoped that both the individuals and governments will take noticeable steps to counter the rising ecological hardships,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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