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today many self driving vehicles are become more available. Some people thing this good thing, others disagree. give your opinion

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In
this
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 present world, technology has become so advanced. autonomous
car
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cars
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 were always the talk of the future and the future is now. Many
people
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 are of
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that it is quite beneficial while others think the opposite of it.
This
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 essay will discuss both
point
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points
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 of view as well as my contention.
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 with,
Cars
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 are the most
convinient
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convenient
 way of transportation when it comes to travelling in local areas. But the risk of driving
cars
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 is
also
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 immensely increasing nowadays.
Invention
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 of driverless
cars
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 can prove to be quite
effecient
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efficient
 as accidents by human error can be avoided. It has
certain
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 kind of system which can optimize their routes to avoid traffic saving us from a lot of hassle.
Self driving
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vechicles
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vehicles
also
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 can be a great aid for
the
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handicapped
people
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 as they don't have to depend on others for transportation. It is automated so just by setting the location, the car will drive itself to the given location making it
convinient
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convenient
 for
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people
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.
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,
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 has come up with their
first
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 autonomous
vechile
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vehicle
 with the intention to
accelearte
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accelerate
world's
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the world's
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 transition to sustainable energy.
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, some
people
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 believe that
self driving
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self-driving
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vechiles
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vehicles
 are quite expensive and unaffordable for
middle class
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 citizens.
Morever
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Moreover
, it will have a huge impact
in
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 the lives of common
people
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 who drive
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vechiles
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vehicles
 for their living . As the demand
of
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self driving
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self-driving
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vechiles
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vehicles
 increases it will have an adverse effect on drivers.
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, in a populated country like India, it would be quite difficult for autonomous
cars
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 to figure out traffic
situation
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situations
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 and even to drive around crowdy places. As
this
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 country is so overpopulated there is no
suprise
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surprise
 that the roads will be crowded all the time and
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vechiles
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vehicles
 move without following the guidelines so there is
probabilty
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probability
 of the system getting crashed. In my opinion, it does have pros and cons of its own but the advancement of technology has been
blessing
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 to human life.
Autonomous
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The autonomous
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 car is the future and is quite
effecient
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efficient
 even tho fear of decreasing jobs is justified. The tremendous enhancement that these changes will bring to
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society
are
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to
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large
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a large
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extend
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 worth it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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