Some people argue that spending a lot of money holding birthday parties, wedding parties and other celebration is a waste of money. However, others believe such parties are important for individuals and for society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Spending on the celebration for some people is a waste of

money

but others think it is important for individuals and for their society. I think

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we should spend

money

on special days but too much spending regularly is a waste.

First

of all, we earn work hard not just for basic things like food, clothes but

also

to enjoy life. Celebrating an important event like a wedding is

important

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expense.

For example

, we spend for my sister’s wedding and it was good as my cousin from another country came and he met my sister’s friend and got married. So, the celebration can give chance to met peoples so it is important for family and for society. Spending too much on small events like a

birthday

party

or Diwali

party

is a waste of

money

. A large family will need more

money

to celebrate all kid's

birthday

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way. Take

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instance, if my family of six want to celebrate all four children’s

birthday

in a good restaurant with a few friends and family

then

we need four to five thousand dollars per year on

only

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birthday

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party

.

This

is big

money

which can be used for swimming or sports coaching

instead

of wasting. To conclude, we must spend

money

on important events in life but spending too much on small regular events is not required and better to avoid. In my opinion, spending once in a few years for a wedding is okay but spending on a

birthday

or small Diwali

party

is not good.