People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern living is at
advanced
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stage due to great changes
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doing things.Community living currently
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improved
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quality of life than the traditional period.I agree with the statement as
technology
advancement has taken over and better education is taking place.
Firstly
,
technology
is well adapted by
people
and it is very productive and helpful in
day today
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activities.Institutions and businesses are all using computers to run their daily activities which
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made work very
manageble
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manageable
.
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is
also
very informed due to the use of mobile phones because there is
availability
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of internet.
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education sector
have
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improved since students do not have to wait for teachers to ask questions rather the students just get to
the
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google and they get the answers.
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research done by the University of Nairobi shows that
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modern
time
is 70% ahead of
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tradition
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time
.
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, it is indispensable that
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society has adapted to the current
time
as it has added value in the way of doing things.
Secondly
,during
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time
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when
technology
was not known,growth was stagnant and
people
would wait for a long
time
for a mission to be accomplished.
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, with the help of
technology
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it has sorted slow growth and lack of immediate information because of availability of internet.
Moreover
,
communcation
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communication
was the most affected because letters would take weeks to reach
to
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the designated person.
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research done by the
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university shows that 20% of
people
in 1000 are not able to use mobile phones.
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,there
still
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some
tradition
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which
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are
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still helpful as
per
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now
which
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cannot be
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overridden
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by
technology
.
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,
currently
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technology
is fast growing which has facilitated
better
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way of living whereby,
people
will have no option but to agree and learn about it very fast.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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