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‏Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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‏In
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 contemporary era, The number of pupils who tend to Study abroad has been ascending drastically,
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 multitude of folks, including me, believe it is beneficial, another group denounce it. Both attitudes are elaborated on in my essay. ‏On the one hand, studying overseas has a lot of favourable features.
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, students who attend foreign schools become more independent, because they have to do their chores themselves.
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, it is a good opportunity to enhance your self-development.
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, foreign schools, colleges and universities have more modern teaching techniques and facilities, which can help trainees learn better and broaden their perspective on life. If they have the chance
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 facilities that pave the way for them to obtain a decent job and achieve educational goals. ‏
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, students who pursue their education in another developing country may find themselves feeling alone and homesick without any emotional support from relatives and old friends. The other demerit is,
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 may experience language problems if you are studying in a place where they speak a different language from your native One ,
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, learning a new language can be tougher than you think, especially, if you need to understand it thoroughly enough to complete an educational course
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 conducted in it. ‏To wrap up what was mentioned above, training Overseas has a lot of merits and demerits
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, it can develop a person's personality and educationally, it can be difficult and emotionally stressful.

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Logical Structure
Ensure your logical flow is consistent by using linking words or phrases effectively. While the ideas are clear, transitions between them could be smoother.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Work on expanding a more detailed discussion of each point. While a good breadth of points is discussed, diving deeper into each argument will demonstrate a more thorough understanding of the topic.
Introduction & Conclusion Present
Your essay clearly has an introduction and conclusion that encapsulates the topic well.
Complete Response
The task has been addressed thoroughly, presenting both benefits and drawbacks as required by the prompt.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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