Some people argue that spending a lot of money holding birthday parties, wedding parties and other celebration is a waste of money. However, others believe such parties are important for individuals and for society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People
think that spending too much
money
on marriages, birthday
celebrations
and other functions is not worth it at all. I totally agree with
this
. But, some
people
feel the opposite of
this
opinion. So,
this
essay will discuss it in detail. To start with, in
this
era of
greedyness
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greediness
, there are, still, many
people
who believe in doing smart things. To illustrate, they do not prefer to invest their
hard earned
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on
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celebrations
because there is
also
another thing which is really important for
the
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society like human rights or education for female children in a country like India.
Also
,
such
people
like to invest in it as charity and they know the actual value of their earnings and they use it properly.
However
, we have some
people
who spend their cash, without thinking, on the
celebrations
.
For instance
, to get high standards of living amongst their relatives and friends they spend without limits. Apart from
this
, they consider
such
spending on activities much more important than spending on themself.
Therefore
, folks consider it as an essential part of life to spend to belong to the group and want to make their special events of life memorable for everyone and show off. To sum up, I would like to conclude that it may be quite crucial for many
people
to celebrate their personal occasions, but, for several
people
, investing their
money
in an intelligent way is more priority because they think that
celebrations
are a waste of
money
. In my opinion, spending too much
money
is only wasting useful
money
that can be spent wisely.
Submitted by Toni R on

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