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Many famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #media #privacy
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Nowadays, we can see
celebrities
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celebrities'
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 lifestyles easier more than in the past because of the advertisement on social
media
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. Some
people
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 believe that many celebrities are treated not fair by the
media
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, while others think that the
media
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 should respect their privacy. In the following paragraph, both of these views point and my opinion will be discussed in detail. As we have known,
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 career is like a spotlight
that
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people
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 are very interested in their personality and lifestyle all the time. Even they go to eat out with their family, or going to shopping with friends, these kinds of activities get more attention from the public.
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, Famous
people
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 should remind themself that if publishers do not release their news, they will not popular and get a job certainly.
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, all
media
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 should respect celebrity’s privacy at the same time even though there are famous
people
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. The
media
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 have to realize that all of them want to spend their life same as the normal
people
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 when they do not have to work.
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, it is the most important thing to provide them with a safe zone in our society . From my point of view, it is a benefit for famous
people
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 who want to lead their family members to stand in the entertainment field as well. They can make more money from
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 situation.
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, some famous
people
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 like to take a photo of their kids and post them on social
media
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. when the child company product saw the pictures, so they are trying to contact to create content from that children. To conclude,
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 celebrities can make more money when they have appeared in the
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, publishers have to provide some privacy for making them feel comfortable as well.
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, from my perspective, it is good for those who want to lead their family member to the entertainment field too.
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