Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic. Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

Advances in medicine have reduced the number of infant deaths through the invention of vaccines. The government should make early vaccinations mandatory for all
children
so that they are in good health.
Although
others argue that they should have the freedom to decide whether to vaccinate their
children
or not. On
one
hand, it is the duty of governments, in the interest of citizens, to reflect that they should introduce legislation to immunize all infants from all deadly viruses that interfere with their healthy growth of
infant
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.
One
such
example is that of
one
of
famous
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doctor
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, who invented
polio
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vaccine and saved countless
children
's lives, and the association of India that carried out free polio
vaccination
campaigns,
then
, severe polio cases have been reduced. Nationally, it is a great achievement.
On the other hand
, some do not like the idea of mandatory vaccinations.
One
of
such
reasons for their behaviour is due to the presence of foreign objects injected into their child. According to a survey by the Indian Medical Association,
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less number of child deaths is due to
side
effects
of
vaccination
.
This
opinion is wrong
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because the benefits of the cure far outweigh any
side
effects
that may arise. In a study done on HPV
vaccination
among young girls, it was reported that few girls experienced
side
effects
.
This
suggests that the benefits of HPV
vaccination
outweigh the potential for
side
effects
in women. In short, the Department should force its people to immunize their
children
against deadly diseases rather than empower their parents to make a vaccine that could hinder their lives. Poor kid for a bad decision.
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