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In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night uncles they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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 that teenagers are
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outings
 prohibited parents believe that
children
 cannot go
out side
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outside
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 without their guardian special at night
time
 . Going
out side
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outside
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 for
teenager
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a teenager
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 is prohibited s
pecialy
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specially
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 for some
ares
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areas
 where
people
 are living
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far away
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faraway
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far away
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 from their
homes
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children
 .there are many reasons s
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specially
especially
special
 for those
people
 which are not living inside of their town's in
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discussed
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 that
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 it is dangerous for
those
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that area
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area
 where the security system is not so good there
people
 are not much comfort to send
of
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 their
children's
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 from faraway of their
homes
 they feel not
comfert
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comfort
 in their vision it is not good for all of their
children
 to go any of the outside
area
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pecialy
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especially
specially
special
 at the
mid night
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midnight
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 or at that
time
 when there is no any special ovulation in that
area
 they
a
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 aid to send of there
children
 from home .
Secondly
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 there is that
people
's who believe that all of
time
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the time
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 either it is
evening
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the evening
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 or either it is night
time
 there
children
's are complete save for all of these they provide
good
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 environment and good facilities for their
children
's
people
 who are
out side
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outside
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 from home they did not prefer to send all the
time
 off all
there
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children
 from their basic
area
 they give them good facilities at all of their home
level
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 To conclude that it is not suitable for
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a teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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 to go outside from their
homes
 they must have to take
any one
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anyone
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 elder with them from their
homes
with out
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without
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 of that elder
people
 it is not safe and secure for them
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imposed
  • accompany
  • ensure
  • safety
  • security
  • protection
  • potential dangers
  • responsible behavior
  • discipline
  • instill
  • awareness
  • societal norms
  • expectations
  • negative impact
  • social development
  • freedom
  • overly strict
  • hinder
  • socialize
  • independence
  • decisions
  • juvenile delinquency
  • crime rates
  • correlational
  • causal
  • exception
  • flexibility
  • legitimate
  • educational obligations
  • balanced approach
  • individual circumstances
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