In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night uncles they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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from faraway of their
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or at that
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aid to send of there
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or either it is night
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environment and good facilities for their
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from home they did not prefer to send all the
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children
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to go outside from their
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elder with them from their
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of that elder
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imposed
  • accompany
  • ensure
  • safety
  • security
  • protection
  • potential dangers
  • responsible behavior
  • discipline
  • instill
  • awareness
  • societal norms
  • expectations
  • negative impact
  • social development
  • freedom
  • overly strict
  • hinder
  • socialize
  • independence
  • decisions
  • juvenile delinquency
  • crime rates
  • correlational
  • causal
  • exception
  • flexibility
  • legitimate
  • educational obligations
  • balanced approach
  • individual circumstances
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