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The internet is generally considered as a boon for mankind. Do the advantages of it outweigh its disadvantages?

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The
internet
 has become a significant part of our lives today. The majority of
people
 finish their daily work by using
internet
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,
that
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 it is really hard to live without
internet
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 .
However
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 it
also
 has
it's
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its
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 own downside.
This
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 essay we are evaluating whether
it's
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advantage
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advantages
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outweigh
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it's
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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. On one hand, The
Internet
 is replete with countless advantages.
Firstly
 We can connect globally with
people
 all around the world with the help of
World
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 wide web .
Such
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that
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internet
 is a perfect tool for gathering information and
also
 it is very helpful for students .
Such
 as in
this
 COVID-19 pandemic situation ,
students
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 classes were conducted through
online
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an online
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 platform ,
moreover
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 students can search
information
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for information
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 without
need
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the need
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 for going to
library
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the library
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.
Infact
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In fact
 the
internet
 is
the
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 excellent aid to study .
Secondly
, communication has been made easier by the
internet
 . We can communicate with our friends and family in any
were
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 in the world .
However
, the
internet
 changed the
communicating
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communication
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 with
people
 both near and far is now very easy . We can send them emails and chat with them through
the
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online platforms
such
 as Facebook and Whatsapp.
On the other
hand
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 the
internet
also
 contains some unwanted elements , when children spend too much time sitting in front of the computer and cause a negative impact on health . Another demerit of the
internet
 is information theft and hacking. As well as
internet
 hackers are growing day by day and a number of
people
 lose their money through the
internet
. To conclude, The
internet
 brings more benefits than drawbacks.
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