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Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others refer groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few people desire learning alone, while others prefer group works. Both have
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 same aim, but different methods.
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, I should mention what one-on-one lesson means. It is
studying
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 process which contains a teacher and a student, only.
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 process
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 learners who cannot work with others. They are not able to share
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their opinions and concentrate ideas among people. They tend to work and learn alone. They do more self-study
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 disciplining
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 the contrary for
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, we have another
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 of studying preferred by many is
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 method in which students are required to work in groups. In
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, learners have a chance to share their ideas with their groupmates in order to discuss and clarify whether they are right or mistaken in some cases. In my view, studying through team works is better than
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 learning process. Because
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 it is
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 more interesting and effective
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 of brainstorming. When you have many views, you have many chances to think about different sides of what you are learning. It gives you an opportunity to find
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 key, best
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, of your field. But, it is
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true
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 fact that there are some people gaining their goals working alone. They do their best without any help. They are
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self-confident
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 and hardworking learners which can break some life rules like strength is in unity. So, which
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 is the best depends on how powerful and reasonable we are.
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