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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

#scientists #technology #experts #society #musicians #artists
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These days, scientists' and technology experts’ role is becoming more vital than the activities of
people
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 of
art
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. While one side makes progress by developing innovative technologies and improving production, the other tries to save our(human) culture and traditions, not seeing that
people
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 have already started to lose humans’ qualities. The way I see it, the dramatic growth of scientists’ value seems to be clearer. In the modern world, scientists and technology experts bring to humanity much more specialities than musicians and artists do.
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, they create better life conditions
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 as quick access to the Internet.
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,
people
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 do not spend a large amount of time finding information about problems that bother them, sitting in libraries.
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, automation. It is noticeable that society is going to automate all processes, which are only possible, due to the laziness of modern
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 and the desire to move forward by creating new opportunities for humanity. Both benefits were made by the hands of the
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 of science. In the nearest future, the influence of music or
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 on society will decrease dramatically. There are no advantages compared with science and technologies, it will always take a back seat. The reason I say so is based on
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’s needs. Because of technological ,
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progress the percentage of workplaces in the labour market for musicians, writers, artists has fallen to the minimum value.
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, it does not mean that the population of Earth should completely forget music and
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, as it helps to boost countries’ economies. In conclusion, the contribution of scientists and technology experts is not compared with
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 of
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,
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, the arts must have a special place in our hearts, as it is important to humankind. I believe that modern society will continue to make progress and will keep the arts in mind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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