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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family thant eating out in restaurants or canteens. do you agree or disagree?

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These days , a majority of
people
 believe that for having a healthy lifestyle,it is better to prepare meals at home rather than eating out . I am in favour of
this
 statement and In
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
First
 and foremost , there are lots of advantages that contribute to eating at home .
For example
 , you are completely aware of its preparation . What I meant by
that is
 , the ingredients and the materials are all fresh and clean so that you eat your meal without worrying about making you sick and ill .
Furthermore
, it is good for your immune system because the way they are cooked is assured . What's more, less amount of oil can be used and
people
 especially mothers due to the fact that they always consider making the best
foods
 for the families so they tend to use healthy methods for making
foods
such
 as boiling .
Secondly
, eating in a restaurant put you into a bad habit and gradually increase your laziness so you end up ordering a ready meal . It does not only cause obesity but is
also
 associated with a wide range of other diseases
such
 as blood pressure and cardiovascular diseases .in spite of its convenience , you may waste all your money on these harmful fast
foods
 . All in all , it goes without saying that,
although
 fast
foods
 are much tastier and
people
 can increasingly be tempted to hamburgers, we cannot deny the fact that healthy eating habits can increase your life span and reduce the chance of suffering from a heart attack. In conclusion, In my opinion, we should increase
people
's awareness about healthy living and encourage them to avoid high cholesterol
foods
 in order to live in peace and quiet.
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