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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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result public has not nurtured to nature. According to these ,ideas some people believed that growing up seedlings,trees where open areas in regions is more significant than building more construction. In the forthcoming ,paragraph we will discuss these ideas and I put my own viewpoint on whether I agree or disagree.
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 of, all we look after nature because type takes water,nutrients and more basic oxygen. I emphasize that if there is no oxygen we do not breathe, people will die and the earth may be desert as well nowhere plants will grow up. flora distribute oxygen. greenery and plants keep the world,
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 many pieces of greenery located in Canada and
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 country is named the lung of the world
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 notwithstanding people cut flora over the year and
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 of them building something for living or relaxing places so that plot pollution. ,
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 we contribute grow up flora and flowers and staple,
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 we prevent most of the illness. Everyone increment to grow vegetation where they live. I stand eagerly embracing the mention that we see above.
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 true buildings are generous and resplendent all of the countries in the world though not to destroy
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 of trees. In conclusion, if we want to a healthy life, in breathing fresh air and eating wholesome food nurture to nature and phase out cutting. I could go on and on with examples but I am sure you get the notion

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