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You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email: * give details of the purchase * explain the problem * explain why you need a replacement urgently

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Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to draw your attention to some faulty garments I purchased through your web store
last
 week and ask for your help to expedite their replacement. The clothing in question is two pairs of black Merino blend formal business trousers with a 36-inch waist, which totalled $300 on your invoice number 31245/22. Unfortunately, when I tried both of these trousers on the waist sizing was inconsistent. One pair measured 38 inches,
while
 the other was 34 inches, neither of which is acceptable.
Due to
 purchasing these for an upcoming business conference
at the end
 of the week, I am now in a very difficult position where I need to hastily replace these items. Could you please have one of your associates manually measure the waists of the replacement trousers to confirm their dimensions and send them by overnight courier to the same address as the previous invoice? Thank you in advance for your priority handling of
this
 issue, and I look forward to receiving the correct garments tomorrow. Yours faithfully, John Smith
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly separates and addresses different aspects of the task for better clarity and engagement.
Task Achievement
Ensure all details relevant to the task are included to provide a complete response. It's always good to cross-check if any specific request made in the task has been clearly answered.
Task Achievement
In adding details about the issue, specifics such as how the problem has affected you or could affect you might enrich your explanation and make your case stronger.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical sequence of ideas from the introduction of the issue to the requested action.
Task Achievement
Appropriate formal tone and polite language fitting the context of a complaint letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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