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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At the moment all the countries have been upgraded they have been building skyscrapers, as result public has not nurtured to
nature
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. According to these ,ideas some people believed that growing up seedlings,flora where open areas in regions are more significant than to built more construction. In the forthcoming ,paragraph we will discuss these ideas and I put my own viewpoint whether I agree or disagree.
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 of all, we look after
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 because
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 takes water,nutrients and more basic oxygen. I emphasize that if there is no oxygen we do not breathe, people will die and the earth may be desert as well nowhere plants will grow up.
Trees
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 distribute oxygen.
Trees
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 and plants keep the world,
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 many pieces of flora located in Canada and
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 country is named the lung of the world
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 notwithstanding people cut
trees
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 over the year and
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 of them building something for living or relaxing places so that plot pollution. ,
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 we contribute grow up greenery and flowers and staples,as
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 we prevent most illnesses. Everyone increment to grow greenery where they live. I stand eagerly embracing the mention that we see above.
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 true buildings are generous and resplendent all of the countries in the world though not to destroy
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 of
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. In conclusion, if we want
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a healthy life,
inbreathing
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in breathing
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 fresh air and eating wholesome food nurture
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 and phase out cutting. I could go on and on with examples but I am sure you get the notion
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