A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays, some
people
believe that judge
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judging
the
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a
person
based
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is based
upon
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on
the
social Correct article usage
apply
status
and materialistic possessions. There is no
much importance given to traditional values Correct your spelling
not
such
as,
kindness, honour or trust. I absolutely oppose Remove the comma
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this
trend and do not agree. It is should be the criteria to judge someone's worth and this
essay attempts to discuss the same.
Respect is shared upon the social status
someone beholds which is, in turn
dependent upon the type of job or the designation of the Add the comma(s)
,turn
person
in the company. It increases the net worth of a status
as he/she can afford more expensive goods according to many. Neighbours consider them worthy to be living near their house only if they have a strong financial position. For instance
, sharing my personal experience, some of the people
living near my house only interacted with me once they got to know that I have a job. Hence
, this
proves that money is more important in the eyes of people
.
Honesty or kindness is the attribute present in the nature of person
. Earlier, Add an article
the person
a person
people
used to respect such
individuals who possessed Correct quantifier usage
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such
features. Even today, some people
like to have such
kind of persons living near them as they can rely on their help and can share their personal problems as well. For example
, if there is some issue related to health or finance, one can connect with those people
to get some advice. However
, there is a very small proportion of the population who adores people
with these qualities.
To conclude, the points don’t sum up that person
's worth is judged upon the societal status
and expensive, exotic items one possess. There is not much heed given to old fashioned values and I totally disagree with it.Submitted by nadita.ayudya on
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