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There is a problem today that copyright materials such as music, films and books are freely available on the Internet with the result that the owners of the works lose money. Do you feel that this is a good or bad thing?

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Nowadays, there has been a widely spread problem on the internet. Copyright materials are easily used by others,
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 is resulting in the owners of the
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 losing
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. As a matter of fact, I believe it is a big issue that we have the free will of using it. There are two main reasons to defend my statement.
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, freely using the
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 of others can lead to the original owner’s hard
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 being wasted.
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, the
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 of others are used without the owners’ permission. Their
work
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 may be used when they do not know. When these
copyrights
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 are used,
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 can use them and even worse, no need of paying back the owners.
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 can lead to them getting
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 easily.
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 issue can
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 happen to famous companies, which produce music and songs. If popular music
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 are used,
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 are able to gain a large amount of
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. Overall, important productions on the internet might be obtained freely and
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 can abuse their
work
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 to sell it out to get
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.
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 the rightful owners might get poor if
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 will use their products freely. Other than
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, once the original owner knows that their
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 is used without notice, there is a possible chance that they will quit doing their career and stop posting. If
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 happens, social media might have no more inspirations to look up to and can lessen creative artists being seen online because of the fear of their creations being used.
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, entertainments are harder to be found and
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 in us finding the internet boring. In conclusion, I do not believe that
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 idea should be supported and I strongly disagree with
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 idea.
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, freely using
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 can cause artists to be in poverty.
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,
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 can lead to the fear of the creators not sharing their creations online which resulting lesser enjoyment found on social media.
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