Some people say that advertising encourage us to buy things we really do not need. Some others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

To begin
with the positive sides of advertising , I would say that it's
useful
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thing
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whom do not knows what to purchase . Especially , for special days like a wedding, birthday or an
aniversary
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anniversary
. And we can easily know and
aquire
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acquire
information about modern
products
. It would help us to make
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choices , and to make
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recommendations
.
However
, some people consider that it is
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unnecessary
staff . And
istead
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instead
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they reckon that it makes some troubles . Let's take
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simple
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example
,
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if you use social media or TV there are many
advertisments
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advertisements
. And it takes some time to watch them sometimes you cannot skip
it
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and you have to leer them till the end . And another problem is - sometimes
advertisments
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advertisements
are not the same as real
products
. It is
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worse than the product
wich
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shown
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on
the
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social media or
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. I have heard about
this
several times , even
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me , too.
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day , I ordered some beauty
products
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online
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service .
Unfortunatelly
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Unfortunately
, the
products
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expected to be sent me earlier was late and adding insult to
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it was not the same as the product that I ordered .
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it was completely another thing. To conclude , I would say everything has advantages and disadvantages. Advertising might encourage us to buy things , which is really do not need
us
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,
although
as I mentioned before it helps us to make easy and right decisions . And in the future companies might develop advertising
service
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and solve some
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problems
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this
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advertising
  • Encourages
  • Buy things
  • Do not need
  • Advertisements
  • Tell
  • New products
  • Improve
  • Lives
  • Viewpoint
  • Agree
  • Sometimes
  • Lead to
  • Persuasive techniques
  • Convince
  • Unnecessary purchases
  • Waste
  • Consumption
  • Clever
  • Marketing strategies
  • Influenced
  • Innovative technology
  • Solutions
  • Educate
  • Options
  • Choices
  • Market
  • Help
  • Informed decisions
  • Products
  • Services
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