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There is a problem today that copyright materials such as music, films and books are freely available on the Internet with the result that the owners of the works lose money. Do you feel that this is a good or bad thing? 250 words

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Today there is a big problem
that is
 copyright materials
such
 as music, films and books are freely available on the Internet resulting in
owners
 of the works losing
money
. I will talk about I think that
this
 is a bad thing for the
owners
 of the
work
,
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 because they spend almost all their time working for the
work
 but after they send it online some
people
 will copy it and
this
 lead to the creator losing cash.,
Furthermore
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 the author will not want to keep on creating because their
work
 will be copied by
people
this
 lead to talented
people
 quitting
this
 area. For ,
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example you have a musical group you have to pay them
money
 and they will make new music but the unwanted
people
 will copy it and lead to the group of
people
 losing
money
 so the
money
 you earn is less than the cash you pay the group. On the other ,hand it is good for the fans of the
work
,
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 because they can listen, watch and read the creation of the creator freely without paying
money
. For ,instance a movie that you like is on but it needed
money
 to watch you can go to the website that can watch it freely
this
 is thanks to copyright or else you will have to pay for it to watch. In ,conclusion copyright materials are a bad thing for the
owners
 because they will lose
money
 but a good thing for fans that don’t want to pay for the
work
. But in my ,opinion it is a bad thing because the
owners
 who lose
money
 will not want to create anymore
this
 will lead to less and less good creation in the future.
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