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Competitiveness is seen as a positive quality for people to have in many societies today. How does this competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative quality?

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These days, many countries regard competitiveness as a quality that can make
people
 more productive. Ironically, in my opinion,
this
 trend leads to the opposite side
instead
 of the positive effect. Under the pressure of
competition
,
people
 are less likely to feel satisfied and need to put in more effort to achieve the same success as now. In a highly competitive society, it is difficult for
people
 to achieve satisfaction through their growth;
instead
, they need to be better than others to gain a
sense
 of satisfaction.
However
, everyone has their areas of expertise and incompetence, so it is harder to get a
sense
 of achievement by trying their best to outperform everyone or even the best in the field than by making their progress. As the
sense
 of failure builds up, the more the desire to gain satisfaction through
competition
 to regain self-confidence becomes a vicious circle. When
people
 are required to spend unnecessary effort to obtain what they are supposed to have, all standards are artificially raised and
thus
 trapped in vicious
competition
. A significant case is a Chinese company called Ali which encourage staff to compete with other departments, other teams and even within their teams. After a series of promotion conditions were publicised, it turned out that
employees
 were overworked to complete what was originally a multi-person task.
Then
, many
employees
 were made redundant since they were not wanted anymore, leaving the remaining
employees
 to stay in their original positions with extra workload and hours but with fewer benefits. There are no winners in
this
competition
 for
employees
, only exploiters who have the
last
 laugh. The promotion of a
sense
 of
competition
 is an orgy for the rule-builders, while for the majority of ordinary
people
, the only thing left is a
sense
 of no longer feeling fulfilled and a tiring and low-paying job.
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