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in the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #newspaper #books
It is undeniable for the rest of the
life
 in future , being able to read everything we want online without using money,will have a crucial role in human
life
 ,and nobody will buy printed newspapers or books. One of the beneficial reasons that would occur is physical problems.
For example
, in some countries
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 Iran, students must carry about five or six heavy books with them to
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school every day,because they need to study and practice on in,so they would their back and spinal cord under pressure. if they
use
 tablets and pcs, they will easily access
to
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all the pdf of their books online,and
either
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other advanced resources for their improvement on lessons. In other cases,university students or employees who
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 the articles and handouts to print every
time
 would
also
use
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in
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 their phones or devices online. another reason is that it is
convenient
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 way.we would
able
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 to
use
alot
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a lot
 of resources
such
 as
channals
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channels
,websites and applications,so we would access to various news and information in
this
 age of technology to improve our knowledge.
moreover
,there is no need to go to the shops and book stores searching for what we
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want
.we
also
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 money.
therefore
, we would allocate our budget and
time
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 other important things. we save our
time
 and budget for our
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 in future too.
For instance
, we can
spent
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 our money
to participate
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 in useful classes. some people believe that reading everything online may
leads
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 to make people lazy,but we can manage our schedule to dedicate some parts of the days
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 reading and either
use
 some apps which have programs to
exersice
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exercise
. In conclusion, I restate that reading everything that we want online without paying is beneficial for
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today's
todays
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life
.Because it decreases the risk of physical problems
such
 as backache.it would
also
 make our
life
 convenient to save our budget and
time
 to allocating on
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 important stuff.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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