Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (250 words).

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anything in the world which could make you feel better for any consequence you should do it

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
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52Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Escapism
2. Social gatherings
3. Cultural heritage
4. Traditions
5. Social change
6. Political expression
7. Awareness
8. Community
9. Belonging
10. Therapeutic benefits
11. Mental health
12. Emotional expression
13. Cognitive performance
14. Concentration
15. Memory
16. Productivity

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Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (250 words).

Fully explain your ideas

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some parents buy their childern a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys.

Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this develomeng bring more advantages or disadvantages.