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Trying to save endangered species from extinction is waste of valuable resources, do you agree or disagree?

Wildlife is a crucial part of our ecosystem and saving them from being vanished is our whole and sole purpose in life. There has been an ongoing argument among
people
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 about whether using valuable
resources
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 on saving our endangered species is the right step or not. I, partially agree with the wastage of
resources
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 as they can be used wisely and more effectively.
This
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 essay will provide you with relevant points on how animals are important for our society and what could be done to save our
resources
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 as well.
To begin
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 with, wild animals are pivotal to our life process, their extinction can lead to disbalance in the ecosystem.
Moreover
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, using the nation's
money
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 in saving them is not a bad idea as
government
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 can earn it back by establishing more national parks for the public and introducing jungle safari for
people
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.
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, it will not only boost tourism but
also
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 provide employment in the nearby area.
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, the setting up of zoos and wildlife sanctuaries have helped
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 officials earn
money
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 from them. Talking about the utilisation of
resources
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 on these remaining species is a big concern among
people
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.
Although
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,
money
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 spent on these ventures are looked after by the central
government
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people
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 are still concerned as their
money
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 is being utilised in
this
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 process.
Furthermore
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, by implementing some measures
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 as
instead
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 of opening more and more zoos, the
government
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 can increase jungle areas for wildlife and utilise the
resources
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 on some other important tasks like establishing hospitals and schools for citizens. To sum up, endangered species are significant for our environment but not at a stake of wasting
resources
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 when other steps can be taken to prevent them from being endangered.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • preserve
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • ecological roles
  • conservation efforts
  • scientific discoveries
  • advancements
  • cultural value
  • aesthetic value
  • employment opportunities
  • local economies
  • ethical responsibility
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