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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
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Today high levels of
sugar
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 are contained in many sources of
food
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, especially in manufactured
food
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. And, of course, eating so much
sugar
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 is not good for our health: it can cause just a simple cavy,
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, but
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 worse problems, like the increasing level of
sugar
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 in blood. Some
people
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 suggest that sugary products should be more expensive, so
people
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 would buy less of them. According to me, I think that
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 solution is not the best one as sugary products include some types of
food
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 that we eat everyday,
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 as bread or pasta.
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 foods, particularly the
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 one, are really important in our diet, so make them more expensive will influence not only our lifestyle, but
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 some
people
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 wouldn't be able anymore to buy the most important
food
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 for them. Just think
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 to poor
people
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, who can maybe afford a few loads of bread per day: what would they eat if we increased bread price? I think that the best solution for
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 problem would be informing
people
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 about what they eat, because sometimes we don't even know that. They have already done something to inform
people
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 about the characteristics of
food
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, of course, and lebels are one of the most important thing, as they tell you all. the ingredients of a particular
food
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. Yet, not many
people
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 spend some of their time reading lebels, or, if they do it, they probably don't know the biggest part of the substances named in the list, as well not everybody knows that there is a specific order of the ingredients in the list. So something we could do is organizing some "talks" to inform
people
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 not only about the function of lebels, but especially about the big amount of
sugar
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 we eat everyday. I think as well that
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 talks should be organised
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 in schools, because
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 children must be aware of what they eat,
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, children can tell what they have learned by these "conferences" at their parents, so the whole family would eat better. To sum it up, I think that it is not necessary to increase the prices of sugary
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 and that all we need is information, that will lead
people
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 to eat less sugary
food
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 and, as a consequence, live better with less problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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