The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
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The Line graphs illustrate the
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of
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enrolled, international and local in Australian Universities from 2001 to 2010 on the basis of totals and commencing.
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, the
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of enrollments of local
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was much higher than overseas
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.
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, the commencing rates for both types of
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were less than the total
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of enrollments. In the graph, it can be noticed that in 2001, 20000 foreign
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applied to Australian Universities.
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, commencing numbers were slightly lower(i.earound 17000) than the total applied for all the years.
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, it can be seen that every three years there is a 20000 increase in the
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of international
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. In the case of commencing numbers, they were always less than
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enrolled in each respective year, and quite interestingly about half of the
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enrolled. Coming to local
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, it can be seen that commencing rates were always lower than the total enrolments and remained stable at 200000 with some fluctuations.
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, the total
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of applications was 400000 in 2001 and it increased rapidly to 600000 until 2007
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