The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
The Line graphs illustrate the
number
of
students
enrolled, international and local in Australian Universities from 2001 to 2010 on the basis of totals and commencing.
Overall
, the
number
of enrollments of local
students
was much higher than overseas
students
.
However
, the commencing rates for both types of
students
were less than the total
number
of enrollments. In the graph, it can be noticed that in 2001, 20000 foreign
students
applied to Australian Universities.
In contrast
, commencing numbers were slightly lower(i.earound 17000) than the total applied for all the years.
Also
, it can be seen that every three years there is a 20000 increase in the
number
of international
students
. In the case of commencing numbers, they were always less than
students
enrolled in each respective year, and quite interestingly about half of the
students
enrolled. Coming to local
students
, it can be seen that commencing rates were always lower than the total enrolments and remained stable at 200000 with some fluctuations.
However
, the total
number
of applications was 400000 in 2001 and it increased rapidly to 600000 until 2007
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