Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, it is becoming common practice for youth to
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from
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their house to
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urban
for schools or work. It is believed that in the cities there
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opporunities
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opportunities
and better education for them.
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with, mostly in
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countrysides
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there are
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many universities and only
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of them can teach students properly. While in the towns, there are at least 10 colleges that can provide good education. As for people who are looking for
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, in
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there is no perspective for youth, as well as big salaries and they ever cannot find a job there. Whereas, there
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opportunities and available
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for them in cities.
This
trend's advantages greatly outweigh its drawbacks.
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, it is
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great chance for youth
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themselves and their nation. Young people
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hope for every country, so if they have a good place to study
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and places to work, it will be a perfect environment for them to grow up as professionals in their field. In conclusion, young ones leaving has
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trend for themselves and others around them. It is
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good opportunity for them to be well-educated and have
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salary as much as they need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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