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More and more people are opting for ready made food instead of freshly prepared food. Do this development has more advantages than disadvantages.

#people #food #development
It is argued that
cars
 without
drivers
 on roads are a major threat
for
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 increasing unemployment because there will be no need for humans to drive for short or long distances. Yet, other doors of opportunities will be opened for persons involved in information technology who will control these
vehicles
. Overall,
therefore
,
number
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 of job vacancies will remain
same
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. Another argument to support it as a negative step is that
cost
 of
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vehicle
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 will increase.
However
, if more
number of
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cars
 are produced, the
cost
 of
production
 will definitely reduce and
consumer
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consumers
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 can buy them on
low
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 budget as well.
Therefore
, technological advancement in the
production
 sector of
vehicles
 in terms of without
drivers
 is a positive measure. It is argued that
cars
 without
drivers
 on roads are a major threat
for
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to
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 increasing unemployment because there will be no need for humans to drive for short or long distances. Yet, other doors of opportunities will be opened for persons involved in information technology who will control these
vehicles
. Overall,
therefore
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of job vacancies will remain
same
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the same
show examples
. Another argument to support it as a negative step is that
cost
 of
Add an article
the vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
show examples
 will increase.
However
, if more
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
cars
 are produced, the
cost
 of
production
 will definitely reduce and
consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
show examples
 can buy them on
low
Add an article
a low
show examples
 budget as well.
Therefore
, technological advancement in the
production
 sector of
vehicles
 in terms of without
drivers
 is a positive measure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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