Stress–related illnesses are becoming increasingly common What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
It is true that stress-related
illnesses
are becoming more popular than ever. While this
is a serious problem, it can be solved by taking up a hobby
.
The main cause of stress-related illnesses
are
becoming increasingly common is the Correct pronoun usage
that are
pressure
that they suffer from work. Since the third
industrial revolution, individuals has
a tendency to work more so that they can be made their own living and be promoted. Change the verb form
have
This
cause a range of mental health
problems included
stress-related Wrong verb form
including
illnesses
such
as headache. According to a recent survey in the USA, people working more 8
hours a day usually suffer more stress-related Change preposition
than 8
illnesses
than the other
who work less than eight hours. Fix the agreement mistake
others
This
demonstrates how working pressure
influences to
Change preposition
apply
employees's
mental Remove the s
employees'
health
.
However
, there are solutions to this
issue. One of the ways is taking up a hobby
that allows one to forget pressure
in their life. Extra activities usually helps
people allow to stop thinking about their worries. And people are easily taking up a Change the verb form
help
hobby
if that hobby
amused them very much. Metal health
is not only treated by Add an article
a psychologist
psychologist
, Fix the agreement mistake
psychologists
hobby
can do it too. For instance
, tennis clubs are usually founded so that colleagues in a
same company can play sports together, reducing their stress and Change the article
the
pressure
. In addition
, tenis help their mental and physical health
always in the best condition.
To sum up, it is clear that stress-related illnesses
are becoming increasingly common due to the pressure
that they suffered. Nevertheless
, the issue can be resolved by finding a hobby
and enjoy
it.Wrong verb form
enjoying
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