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Many retired people today are choosing to live in other countries. What are the advantages or disadvantages of this?

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People
 have different opinions about where will they live in the future. While many
people
 find out that, old generations, especially those above 60 years old
people
 tend to live in another part of the world.In my opinion, travelling gives a lot of benefits for
people
.
However
,
this
 action may be risky for retirement. On the one hand, travelling is good because you can get a lot of benefits. In other words,
people
 have to travel to a new
country
 because they need to convenient places ,especially old generations and
also
 they would like to move which
country
 valued their retired
people
.
For example
, In my
country
 the government formed special work for retirement
people
, That's why day-by-day is a steadily increase of immigrants in my
country
.
On the other hand
,It is a bad habit to change
people
's
country
,because the old generation
people
 were more unsuitable, and these actions are affected harmful to their psychology.
As a
result
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 they go into depression.
For instance
, they can face some kind of problems like language difficulty, cultural diversity and so on.
Consequently
, they feel alone and separated from the community. In conclusion, I think old
people
 may visit lots of places but the government should control retirement
people
's life and if necessary accounted for a piece of the local budget for them.
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