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Many retired people today are choosing to live in other countries. What are the advantages or disadvantages of this?

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People
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 have different opinions about where will they live in the future. While many
people
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 find out that, old generations, especially those above 60 years old
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 tend to live in another part of the world.In my opinion, travelling gives a lot of benefits for
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.
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 action may be risky for retirement. On the one hand, travelling is good because you can get a lot of benefits. In other words,
people
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 have to travel to a new
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 because they need to convenient places ,especially old generations and
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 they would like to move which
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 valued their retired
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.
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, In my
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 the government formed special work for retirement
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, That's why day-by-day is a steadily increase of immigrants in my
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.
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,It is a bad habit to change
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,because the old generation
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 were more unsuitable, and these actions are affected harmful to their psychology.
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 they go into depression.
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, they can face some kind of problems like language difficulty, cultural diversity and so on.
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, they feel alone and separated from the community. In conclusion, I think old
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 may visit lots of places but the government should control retirement
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's life and if necessary accounted for a piece of the local budget for them.
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